WIPpet Wednesday- Giving Up & #ROW80 update

No, not me. I’m not giving up. Not yet. But there comes a time in every story (or at least, there should) where a character reaches a point when he or she is ready to give up, when things can’t get any worse, when they’d do anything to get out of a situation.

I was just revising this last week, and it’s still wandering forlornly around in my brain during quiet moments. This is Aren again, a guy who never expected to care this much about anything. He’s done something stupid, and he and Rowan are both paying for it.

Thirteen sentences from chapter 26 (curse you, chapter 26! And you too, 27, I’m still watching you). Today is 17/7/2013… 1+7+7-2-0=13.

Isn’t WIPpet math the best?

This is all I’m going to give away from this part of the story, because we’re (obviously) getting into spoiler territory. I like to think the book would be enjoyable even if you knew the ending, but why ruin the fun, right? Sorry I left something out here…

I’d exhausted my supply of magic in finishing *wee spoiler*, but that didn’t leave me completely helpless. I curled my body around hers, wrapped my cloak around both of us, and channelled what magic I could take from the land into producing heat in my own skin. Still the cold night air pressed in around us, greedy, stealing everything I created.

My people know a number of deities, the great unnamed Goddess and a seemingly limitless pantheon of lesser gods. It had always seemed to me that they’d shown little concern for me over the course of my life, and for the most part I’d shown them the same courtesy. Now, though, I closed my eyes, and I begged. Get us through this night. Let me help her to safety. Keep Severn away, and I’ll do anything. I’ll change. If you demand it, I’ll go back and face whatever I now owe to my family. Just let her come back, let her live. I didn’t even know who I was praying to, only that I needed to hold onto those thoughts to keep me from going mad.

Man, I need to post something less depressing soon. Where did that mer-people party get to?

And should that be “whom” in the last sentence? I suck at whom.

So anyway, if you’ve been around for a while, you know the rules, and you know you can join right in any time. We don’t bite. We might cookie-dough-and-glitter you (this is the new tar-and-feather, it’s much more fun), but that’s about the worst you’ll get from the WIPpeteers. Post an excerpt from a work in progress that relates to today’s date, add your blog link through the linkie you’ll find at My Random Muse, and be sure to drop by and comment on other people’s stuff. Seriously, join us. Best part of my week.

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#ROW80 Update

OK, we need a Round of Words update today, don’t we? Man, Wednesdays are busy around here!

Writing: Trying to get 4 chapters a day ready for beta readers. Actually, I should be doing that right now… Other goals are good, see you later!

(Oh, and I’m adding the goal of visiting three or more ROW80 blogs every Sunday and Wednesday… since I’m doing that anyway. Looking for more updates? Here’s the link!)

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About Kate Sparkes

Kate Sparkes was born in Hamilton, Ontario, but now resides in Newfoundland, where she tries not to talk too much about the dragons she sees in the fog. She lives with a Mountie, two kids who take turns playing Jeckyll and Hyde, two cats, an intentional boxer and an accidental chihuahua. She's the author of the bestselling Bound Trilogy (mature YA Fantasy). www.katesparkes.com View all posts by Kate Sparkes

32 responses to “WIPpet Wednesday- Giving Up & #ROW80 update

  • Ink and Papyrus

    I love the way you incorporate the magic seamlessly into your world. It seems as natural as breathing. The character voice is also really clear and distinctive.

  • L. Marie

    A dark night of the soul!!! Cool!!! This is very compelling. Love how he wraps his cloak and his body with such tenderness. Very vivid.

    To answer your question, if you were writing a research paper, yes whom would be correct. “I didn’t even know to whom I was praying.” But see how stiff that sounds? You’re writing from the perspective of a desperate man, who probably wouldn’t care about grammar at this point.

    • Kate Sparkes

      He generally has better grammar than I do, though. 😉

      Thanks. I’ll probably leave it “who,” but on first draft “whom” actually fit the character better… This is why I hate niggly little things like that!

  • erickeys

    “they’d shown little concern for me over the course of my life, and for the most part I’d shown them the same courtesy.”

    I love that line! Deism is pretty awesome, huh? Much more hopeful than the whole gnostic “god is crazy and sort of hates you” philosophy I’ve sort of found myself in lately. Of course, looking around us, what is more likely? That the gods don’t care much for us or that the gods sort of like to make us squirm?

    I just calls ’em as I sees ’em.

    • Kate Sparkes

      Given only those two choices I’d have to go with the not caring; I think the pain in our lives comes from other people using their free will to be assholes, not from a sadistic deity. Certainly seems to work that way for this character, anyway. 🙂

      • erickeys

        Ha! I wasn’t trying to be so binary. I guess my comment was more autobiography rather than theology. 🙂

        • Kate Sparkes

          lol- I picked up on that! I do find it an interesting question, though… and I don’t impose my own views onto my characters, so it’s fun to explore that a bit once in a while.

          • erickeys

            It is. I find myself obsessed sometimes with ideas and world-views. I think I took too many philosophy classes or something. I’d like to say that I’m an objective observer, but i do have a tendency to make these issues intensely personal. It’s colored a lot of my writing lately…

  • Elaine Jeremiah

    Love this Kate. I really get a sense of the burden Aren feels and it’s lovely the way he wants to protect Rowan.

  • Jae

    You do such a great job with imagery. I feel like I’m always able to picture where they are in one sense or another when reading your stories snippets. Nice work!

  • ReGi McClain

    As depressing as it is, I think this may be my new favorite Kate S. WIPpet. 🙂 His tenderness toward Rowan is very touching, as is his desperate prayer.

  • kathils

    Very vivid, very telling. Another outstanding excerpt. I love that it paints the caring, passionate side of Aren and his willingness to sacrifice to make it right.

  • Emily Witt

    I’m kind of flailing a bit here because I love situations like this where the characters are desperate. I’m really feeling his helplessness right now.

  • Alana Terry

    Yes, technically whom, but who really talks like that? I like the humanity and weakness portrayed here, as well as the tenderness combined in it. Nice work!

  • Kate Frost

    Vivid and beautiful imagery despite the darkness of the scene. Big thumbs up from me!

  • Christina Olson

    Very beautiful tender scene! I’m curious to see if Rowan does live, and if Aren keeps his promises to whatever deity he was praying to

  • Jill Hutchinson Haugh

    Awesome pleading with the Dieties there. We’ve all done it, eh? And you have your work cut out for you! Keep up the good work and never say fie.
    ~Just Jill

  • shanjeniah

    I love this, and found it tender and deepening, rather than depressing (but then, I tend toward optimism, so I’m betting everyone makes it through the night a little warmer and wiser, maybe, than they were…).

    A lovely and bittersweet snippet, and I second ReGi’s comment about the math!

    Speaking of math, I owe you thanks for posting this to the ROW80 linky on a 2, so that I could visit your WIPpet, and give you your sponsor visit, all at once. Great job on the goals, and I’ll be waiting for the chance to buy the book and find out how Aren and Rowan make it through the night. =D

  • Adrian

    I love dark and depressing!! lol. I love the internal religious/faith stuff that’s going on here.

  • Sarah

    This excerpt took me to a character called Moirin by one of my favorite authors, Jacqueline Carey. She paints wonderful description of character and setting and emotion with her words, and you did the same. I was drawn right in to the moment, and to me, I really like stories that pull emotion from me. It doesn’t have to be funny or lighthearted all the time. I like emotional plots; after all, emotion is what drives us. This was a great excerpt!

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  • Gloria Weber

    Danger in your WIPpet! And promising Gods ish is never good. Especially promises you’d loathe to keep!

    (Sorry it took me so long to comment.)

    Glad your goals on on track!

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